Hi Lee, thanks for the opportunity!
Hi Jonathan! Thanks for the read. Although you did a good job, it’s a bit more authoritative in tone than we are looking for. I’d like to have you try another read sounding a bit younger and conversational in style (as a young college student would.) The VO in this commercial has the kind of tone we are looking for: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tzMpWiGL8D8
Overall, the pace needs to be sped up a bit. If you could read the first line without pausing until “DNA..” so the inflection goes down instead of up, that will help set the platform for the rest following.
Hopefully these comments help you some. Thanks for your help!